1. I like the way you use the evidence from The Climate Casino to back up your thesis statement. For instance, you give a good explanation for why New York is not prepared for rising sea levels in your third paragraph.
2. One thing that I think needs improvement is how you summarize from thebook. Sometimes I can't tell if you're using your own words or using the words other people wrote. Maybe if you write "the author says" before some phrases I can have a better idea of this.
3. There is too much information in your fourth paragraph. I think that if you just focused on how carbon dioxide enters the atmosphere the paragraph would be more effective. I think that's a strong point because New York will need to plant a lot of trees to get all the new carbon dioxide out of the air.
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